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Post by Ellie on Nov 19, 2007 17:30:44 GMT -5
Okay, I finally got through the first four sections of this...and I must say, HOT DAMN!!!! April, I'm wondering why you're looking up to me as a writer, I am blown away by your technique. I have found no flaws in anything so far, and I'm not guessing I will as I read on, either It's very easy to follow and picture in your head, which is the mark of a good story and good storyteller. The personality seems so right on for what so many of us envision Toby being in in RL, so kudos for that. I can't wait to keep reading, I'm finding myself getting immersed into each section....great, great job =)
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Post by April on Nov 20, 2007 13:02:21 GMT -5
Oooh Ellie! If you just read the first 4 chapters...you haven't read nothing yet girlie! OMG, you are in for some MAJOR drama and some steamy scenes!! Hahahahahaha!
And thanks so much for your review! As you continue w/ the story, please feel free to share your thoughts and comments. I really appreciate you taking the time to let me know what you think. I'm so happy that you like my writing style. That means a lot coming from you because I really look up to you as an author.
And I'm glad you think I made Toby believable. I tried to remember as much as I could about his MySpace and develop his personality the best I could from that. I really tried to show Toby's personality in-depth and pretty much strip his emotions raw so he's left vulnerable. I did that w/ Bridget too, but more w/ Toby since Bridget is the narrator and you pretty much know what she's thinking and feeling because she tells you. Since this is a Toby fanfic, I wanted the readers to really get an idea about what I think Toby is like.
I hope you enjoy the rest of the story!!!!
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Post by Ellie on Nov 20, 2007 14:10:06 GMT -5
I just read section 5 and can't wait for more!!!!
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Post by April on Nov 20, 2007 17:32:36 GMT -5
Chapter 5 was a first-look at another part of Toby's personality. He's a pretty complex person...you'll see. This is also the chapter in which the drama begins between Toby & Bridget. Bridget seeing Toby drunk and turn almost psycho is a turning point. LOL!
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Post by Aryss on Nov 21, 2007 11:31:42 GMT -5
Steamy scenes? You woman made me blush like a little school girl and it's not so easy to do,lmao. Dudette,you have the best sex scenes ever! xD
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Post by April on Nov 21, 2007 12:08:57 GMT -5
Hahaha! It has to be steamy when it involves someone as beautiful as Toby.
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Post by Aryss on Nov 21, 2007 12:47:53 GMT -5
Hahaha! It has to be steamy when it involves someone as beautiful as Toby. True that,true that. I wouldn't have it any other way But needless for me to repeat that Ellie said. You've got talent,love. I enjoyed your fic very much.
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Post by April on Nov 24, 2007 12:27:58 GMT -5
Thx Aryss, I'm glad you liked my fics. I don't know if you're into slash but my next Toby fic is centered around that. It's still Toby & Bridget, but with a twist. It touches on a topic that was introduced in chapter 17 of Prelude. Once my friend finishes making the banner, I'll post the fic. It's a one-shot like the Sex-Ed fic and it's pretty long too, so be prepared to read a lot. LOL!
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